That Strange Resolve


[Image: page 13 of “Jane Eyre” by Charlotte Bronte. Most of the text has been blacked out. The remainder reads:

I resisted the new strength
of myself,
that strange resolve

shame! How is he my master?

my impulse
must break

she loosened her folded arms,
dark and incredulous

She never did so before]

[this is an erasure poem, and this is what that is]

Photo by Nicole Mason on Unsplash

13 thoughts on “That Strange Resolve

  1. Tell me about your decision to keep the POV switch. It works; I’m not sure how though. We go from first person to third omniscient (that’s how I’m reading it anyway). It’s like the reader zooms out of the narrator’s ear to check her body language.

    • I knew it would be tricky to try to keep it, but I hoped it would work one way or another. That’s part of why there’s such a big break in the text (5 lines blacked out compared to 1 or 2 elsewhere). I hoped it would read as an outsider’s perspective observing the narrator’s new strength flowering.

    • It was fun but way trickier than I anticipated! It was hard to make something new happen in the text, rather than just condensing what was there.

  2. I’m with Nate. I don’t know how it worked, but the point of view shift is amazing. It made me think of a woman struggling to find her strength, then when she does, it becomes something greater than herself.

  3. I didn’t get the POV switch my first read through, but after reading the other comments, I gave it another chance. I could finally understand what the others were saying.

  4. I really liked this. I am not a poem person and I find them difficult to both read and write. However, this one sticks with me. I honestly didn’t pay attention to the POV shift. If it works it works. Like orange and chocolate, right? 🙂

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